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Oh dear...

Fractured Man - Jacob R. Blacquiere

I read 6% of this book, tried to force myself to see past the issues with the writing, but alas, I couldn't. There were too many, sometimes several issues to a single page.

The issues ranged from incorrect word choices (as per my quote for this book). That word doesn't mean what you think it means... Try 'thrashing', thrashing bodies sounds better than thriving bodies, especially when one is dying.

Other issues included too many attributions outside of 'said'. Things like: Yuri snapped, Sal wailed, and Winston screamed.

Probably one of the worst instances of rambling I've ever read, this story tells you something, then follows up with the same thing, just to make sure you got it.

Examples include:

Getting the raider into his line of sight, Winston sprinted the distance towards him and struck at full speed, tackling him hard into the dirt. Their bodies slammed with a thud, but Winston leapt to his feet first before the raider could recover.

Also, superfluous words much?!

Despite his words and the resolve with which he spoke them, in his mind, he knew Sal would be dead soon, probably within a matter of minutes.

Why not just say: he knew Sal would be dead in a matter of minutes?

Things also ranged into WTF territory a couple of times with rather bizarre things happening. Like when Winston shoots a guy square in the chest, but it's described as 'leaving a small, searing flesh wound' which to me makes me think that either Jacob and I have differing opinions of what a flesh wound is, or Winston is a really crappy shot!

I had a look at the other reviews, majority seem to rate this as non-original and a bit boring. From what I've read, I'd have to agree.

*Note: I was provided an electronic copy of this book in return for an honest review.**