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Overall, this book is made up of four short stories. Each focuses on a young Australian woman and the various states of their love lives.
I didn't feel any emotional pull to any of the women, nor the men in their lives. I did get annoyed at the rather underhanded and insulting behaviour of some of the parents in the story though, especially Michaela's parents.
Underlying each story I felt a sense that each of these women behaved as if the men in their lives were defining them, like they couldn't function appropriately without someone telling them what to do. This 'person' was generally male too, be it boyfriend, husband, father or boss.
The book needs another pass over by an editor, there were a number of small typos and errors.
Comments for each story are below, along with the things I noticed in each.
I liked the musical elements to this story, but little else. Michaela came across as a little fickle and a little whiney.
8% - ...increased by (delete by, insert my) sense of comfort...
11% - and as (wrong font) arranged we left...
26% - ...since I'd be(en) held, kissed, or loved.
34% - Bye (delete e) the way...
The String of Life
This was my second least favourite story. The ending was so abrupt it felt like the ending was tacked on as a 30 second after-thought.
37% - "So, what are (you) doing...
46% - Chapter 10 text is centre aligned and smaller than the whole page.
Wtf? That was so abrupt!
This was my least favourite story. I really disliked how Amelia came across as needing a man.
There were too many adverbs and unnecessary words, which was throughout the book, but worse in this story.
56% - ...become an (delete an) "an item"
58% - Suddenly I become acute(ly) aware...
69% (but all throughout too) - too many adverbs!
Grr, why can't the women be happy without a man?
I wanted to slap the naive out of Lauren. In her defence she was young, but it was still annoying. I didn't like either Rob or David and also wanted to slap Zoe.
89% - I (delete I, insert A) guy like that wants to respect...
96% - As he (delete he, insert his) smile became rueful...