The premise for this one could have been so much more than it was. I had high hopes.
I found the two main characters (Abigail and Connor) to be both shallow and unrealistic. I hated the plot use of the best friend (Anna) towards the end, it was cliche and completely unoriginal. There were a lot of issues with the formatting on the kindle, that ranged from incorrect lining/spacing to split words (e.g. they sa t down at th e tabl e) throughout the entire document that need to be addressed for the book to have a finished, professional feel.
I found a few rather obvious linkages to [b:Inkheart|28194|Inkheart (Inkworld, #1)|Cornelia Funke|http://d.gr-assets.com/books/1328866790s/28194.jpg|2628323] by [a:Cornelia Funke|15873|Cornelia Funke|http://d.gr-assets.com/authors/1204659420p2/15873.jpg] that were a little too close to her original idea.
The plotting and pace were a little off too, the busy, fast paced sections were not nearly fast enough or action packed, and the slower 'world-building' and 'character-building' sections were too long, but concentrated on the relationship between the two main characters instead of actually introducing the reader to them.
All that being said, I did actually enjoy the story. I think the whimsy and fantasy aspects were the best feature of the story. With a strong handed editor, and a look at the formatting I think this book could easily be a 3-4 star read.
Some other things I noticed:
14% - '...and another hated my guys (guts)...'
33% - '...he drug (dragged) me off...' this occurs a few times in the book.
51% - I found the immaculate comment really jarring, mainly because I associate immaculate with clean/tidy, not perfect. I personally would have picked a different word.
53% - No mention of protection. Will this come in to play later? Considering it's a YA book, this may need to be addressed.
65% - "it' (it's) right here in your phone,"
**Note: I was provided with an electronic version of this book in return for an honest review**