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Full disclosure. I got this for free on Amazon after one of the groups I follow on Facebook raved about it. I had high expectations...
I was sorely mislead.
Considering it's only about 119 pages long, the amount of tiny, easily fixable and rather obvious typos, grammar and spelling mistakes was irritating. I started to list them but got bored of it at about 57% through so I stopped. The things found could very easily be picked up by a spellcheck, so I'm not sure what (if any) editing has been done on this.
The storyline was sound enough, it could easily have been turned away from the erotic and turned into an Indiana Jones style adventure story, it would have needed a lot more detail put into the characters and the background as well as the would building, but it could have been done. I think it would have been better.
The sexy stuff was passable, it seemed rushed and rather plain despite the varying levels of kink involved. It read like a male's fantasy, not something a woman would write (I think there'd be more sensory information if a woman wrote it) and really was fairly two dimensional. If you want to try something erotic, don't let this be your first taste or you will likely be disappointed.
In terms of enjoyment, it wasn't too bad. I think the pacing was quick enough to keep me reading, though character development was really set on the back burner. If you want a quick read for titillation that has a reasonable storyline and plot, give Luxuria a try. It might be your thing.
Things I noticed:
21% - 'Don't use it unless I tell you too (to)'
32% - '...thier (their) shapes and features damaged...'
33% - '"It's turn (turned) into a real...'
33% - '"Let's just hope is (it) has a good ending...'
33% - '"Also the only one who seems to thinking worrying about it is going to solve anything."' - WTF!?
57% - '...loyalty so they (that) we could serve...'